Corrections

'The dungy earth' should have been 'Our dungy earth'

Others to watch out for:

"Her tongue will not obey her heart, nor can
Her heart inform her tongue."

I have tongues informing hearts and hearts jumping all over tongues and it's a mess.

And

"Commend unto his lips your favouring hand."

I come up with favouring lips and soldier's hands and Cleo's lips and hands and wow if I get that wrong I'm hooped. At least the other is an aside. This one is trying to give orders with some semblance of authority. I suppose I've been looking at too many cubist paintings.